This fake news article is for this week's writing challenge! If you don't understand it, read my book, Four to Stand, which is almost posted in its entirety on this website!
PITTSBURGH, PENNSYLVANIA: Four Teenagers Show Signs of Supernatural Ability
Today, millions of people crowded around their televisions sets to watch a broadcast that may change the world as we know it today.
Four teenagers – Landon Jameson, Jonas Gonzales, Ness Parazzi, and Max McCloud – were caught on tape Wednesday evening using what can only be described as “supernatural powers.”
“I couldn’t believe my eyes,” newscaster Penny Wallace told us during our interview. “Paul [the cameraman] and I were filming about the development of the new Waterfront shopping area, when we saw a big flash of light behind me.”
That big flash of light turned out to be huge – after all, it left the teenagers exposed. It’s not every day that a person sees someone shoot a fireball out of their hand or throw a person without touching them.
“They fled the scene after killing this…thing,” Officer John Eugene, who arrived at the scene moments later, reported. “It looked like some kind of angel, only it was all black. Really, it may have been the most frightening thing I’ve ever seen – and trust me, I’ve seen a lot after twenty years on the police force.”
The FBI was called into action shortly after. “We had evidence of some kind of superhuman ability on tape,” Officer Eugene informed us. “We didn’t know how dangerous these kids were, or what they were.”
Unfortunately, we are still waiting for some kind of an explanation from the four teenagers.
“They are in the custody of the FBI,” Officer Eugene said. “And they are considered armed and dangerous. However, they seem to be working well with the FBI, even though we haven’t heard any further developments.”
The FBI refused to comment on the issue until a later date.
“I always knew she was some kind of freak,” Claire Horowitz, the stepsister of Ness Parazzi, commented. “I mean, all you had to do was look at her and her creepy friends. They just don’t match, you know? But I never thought it would be this bad.”
Soon after giving her comment, Ms. Horowitz was pulled inside of her house by her father, who would not comment.
Further developments of this story will be released as soon as more information is acquired.
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Knight Hardy here on a mission to ensure that all works on YWS has at least two reviews. You will probably never see this but....Imma do this anyway.
First Impression: This is quite a nice little article. And the story this is connected to also sounds pretty interesting. I might just check it out someday. It's written pretty well with the right amount of description for an article and the language is also quite appropriate for an article.
Anyway let's get right to it,
Great opening line, drags the reader into the article pretty quick.
How did she see the light if her back was turned to it? Reflection? Or was it like ridiculously bright?
If they don't know what it is how can be they be sure that it is in fact dead?
So the FBI just called them only to say they were maybe working well with us.(As indicated by "seems") but then they just didn't tell them anything else.
Very interesting ending. I might just actually go read "Four to Stand".
Aaand that's it for this one.
Overall: It's a pretty good article. I am not sure of the formatting for one so I can't say if that's quite correct nor do I know what this writing challenge was so can't comment on that either. The stuff that's written however does remind me of the style of writing you find in an article and it was definitely very interesting for us to read.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
Ah ha...I knew that I wrote 10/07, not 11/07! Shoulda checked it!
Thanks for letting me know about the title, too. It's not as exciting as before, but ah well...what can ya do? lol.
Thanks again!!!
<~>Jen<~>
This could actually work as a side piece to your actual story
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Oh, and the title is messed up - that happens with long ones, it cuts off the end.
EDIT: And it should be 11/07, not 10/07